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There's something that you need to hear
look in my eyes and hear me clear
listen to me as I wipe my tear
humor me as long as I'm here.

My heart feels something in demand
That my brain can't seem to understand
Nothing I feel was ever planned
My body, emotions in command

You seem to think I'm stalling
But my heart inside is falling
These emotions are appalling
Sometimes they have me crawling

Because as soon as you left me
My heartbeat stopped painfully
It was a nightmare I could see
Unfolding because of thee

Because you were gone
I needed to cure what was wrong
Only our love kept me strong
I get weak when I hear our song

Please don't turn away from my eyes
I'm not going to articulate lies
You were the reason I looked to the skies
Now all we have are bitter goodbyes

I don't want to live this 'alone' phase
I don't want to live lonely these days
I don't want to live without your gaze
Whatever you do set my heart ablaze

My ears leaning to your voice
My nose stagnant with your scent
My lips feeling your kiss, oh, me
My neck feeling your bite!

The submission in your face
The Smell of your breath
The excenuation in your voice
fuck, the tone of your sigh!

Your shiver to my touch
Your laugh to my jokes
Your kisses punctuating my lines
Gone, because I lied

I miss all of those things
That our separation brings
The memories loneliness springs
We met as kids on the swings

I need you to survive
Without you I'm not alive
Your love makes me thrive
I need you in my arms to strive

I've been a bastard before
Living without you is a chore
Please come back I implore
Please don't hate me anymore.
©2006-2009 ~steelrocker05
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Author's Comments

A conversational poem after a break-up... It's just a poem, It had no bearing on my love life
mainly because I don't have one ^_^

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it seems broken, like the stanzas don't connect /flow well with each other. You should also maybe think of using commas and fullstops as they give more guidance on how a poem is to be read and generally makes it better. You tried too hard to rhyme, which is why the last stanza ended weakly. And there was a moment there you ignored your rhyming scheme which threw it off a bit.

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